War commander Mini Series 1

redspower67
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Little story to go with the transmission. 



Com***ders!  We've detect** incoming hostiles!  They **** out of ***here,
                                                               we **ought it was al***, but now we're surr******!
                                                                              There's to* ***y to...



                                                                      ...TRANSMISSION INTERRUPTED.

Immediately after WT transmission....


The commander- Da*m it 

The commander- Someone isolate that signal.

The commander- We need to find out were WrongThinker was communicating from.

Soldier- We are trying sir but the signal is being jammed somehow. 

The commander- Get me something anything. Preferably telling me were to send troops.
  
Soldier- Wait! We've just received some coordinates and something else.

Soldier- Putting it on screen now sir. 


The commander- Would someone like to tell me, WHAT IM LOOKING AT HERE! 

Lead operator- It is a black thing. 

Sarkis- *sigh* it looks like the out line of a mech suit but not one i've seen. 

Sarkis- Not to mention this one looks big very big. 

The commander- so you think that WrongThinker was trying to warn us?

Sarkis- Yes I do but not just that he was probably telling you get ready because there is a storm coming.

Commander- Sarkis update me now

Sarkis- it seems that this new tech is...wait, we are being hacked commander

Commander- well get them out of our systems 

Sarkis- sorry sir, they fried everything, and took all info we had on this mech, but....

Commander- but what

Sarkis- they left us a warning of sorts

Commander- what does it say

Sarkis- it says "don't you worry about our new toy, you will see him soon enough" 

Commander- da*m

Commander- Sarkis Get me B.J. And if he doesn't come tell him that I taking his moped. 

Sarkis- Yes sir, anyone else.

Commander- Yes bring me Doran and that new girl Deena, I think it's time she proves herself. 

Sarkis- Yes sir. Doran- you sent for us commander

Commander- yes, Doran, gather your squad of nightmares, Deena, get ready to bring fire to the skies, Dante, you ready the tanks and get ready to bring hell

Deena- sir might i ask what all of this is for

Commander- we are under attack

Dante- by who sir

Commander- *sighs* we don't know yet

Commander- Anyway get to it.

Commander- Deena hold on a minute.

Deena- Yes commander?

Commander- Tell Mark that I'm allowing him to pilot the E. Sandstorm just this once.

Deena- Sir with all do respect I think me and my cyclones will be more than enough to handle this. 

Commander- I'm not saying that your not skilled Deena, I'm just not taking any chances we don't know what were up against. 

Deena- (begrudgingly)  Yes sir.  


Deena- Mark!  Get over here. 

Mark- Huh? What do you want? 

Deena- The commander choose you to pilot the E. Sandstorm.

Mark- Yes!! Finally this is going to be great..

Deena- He also said that you can only use it this once thats it.

Mark- What? NOOOoooo! What did I do wrong. 

Engineer- He probably hasn't forgotten how you crashed the Titan into that command center. 

Deena- He did what!?   

Engineer- Ya you didn't know, you must be new here everybody's heard about that story. 

Mark- it was an accident though

Worker- or how about the time he ran the growler into the river

Deena- HE DID WHAT!!

Engineer- didn't he also self destruct one of the power plants.

Worker- Pretty sure it was two.

Deena- *walks away shaking head* this is crazy.

Mark- i wont fail the commander this time.

Engineer- *pats mark on the back* at least she doesn't know you crashed her helicopter yet

* few seconds later *

Deena- MAAAARK!!!!!


Just to be clear Kurt is the driver of the BFG X. 



Engineer- Better start runnen you know how those corpus ladies are. 

Mark- AAAHHH!!

Deena- Get back here!  When I'm finish with you they won't won't be able to tell you from an oil spill!

Doran- Well looks like their having fun. 

Kurt- Doubt it, did you see what Mark did to Deena's cyclone? 

Doran- No why?

Kurt- There is barely anything left of it It's going tho take the engineers 3 hours to fix it when the usual is 1 or 2.

Doran- Da*m remind me to never let him near my nightmare.

Kurt- Hell after the titan incident i've installed an alarm system on the BFG to make sure no one, especially Mark, tries to use it. *alarm sounds* 

*alarm sounds*

Doran- huh, whats that never heard that alarm before

Kurt- sh*t

Deena- *runs pass Doran and Kurt* 

Doran- Deena whats wrong, wheres mark

Deena- HES IN THE **** BFG RUN

Mark- *Rams BFG through the wall* 

Doran- well...

Kurt- dont worry, i have a plan

Kurt- HEY MARK PRESS THE RED BUTTON, IT WILL LOCK ON TO DEENA

Mark- SWEET *smashes button*

Mark- *gets ejected from BFG* 

Kurt- *pulls doran back* 

Mark- *lands in front of Doran and Kurt*  ouch

BFG X runs into power plant and they both explode. 

Kurt- MAARRK! Your dead! You hear me dead!!

Doran- Calm down man the engineers will have it fixed in about 12 hours or so.

Kurt- Come on let me go he's got to learn he can't get away with this anymore. 

Doran- Wait I know something worse than death. 

Kurt- (stops struggling and turns to Doran) What could be worse than death?

Doran- Looks at Mark (who is still stuck in the ejector seat) then back to Kurt and smiles an evilish smile. 

Doran- Why not get Dante to put him thru his training course, and make him eat his cooking too. 

Kurt- ( Kurt pauses for a moment stunned) No man should have to endure that. 

Kurt- I like it ( Kurt and Deena who had now joined them had an equaly evil grin as Doran did and were all now looking at Mark)

*15 minites later*

Kurt- Hey Dante.

Dante- What do you want?

Kurt- Meet Mark, he wants to go through your training course

Mark- Thats right sir, i want to be a great fighter

Dante- points off in the distance* Are you the one who just blew up those two power plants?

Doran- *comes from behind Dante* come on Dante, train him, whats the worst that could happen?

Dante- Well seeing how much damage he did with Kurt's BFG, the worse that could happen is he'd kill us all.

Deena- *sitting on Dante's tank* he's got a point.

Dante- Get off my tank woman!

Deena *jumps off tank* I say if you can train him that would be great.

Kurt- Yeah i mean look he is all ready to be trained.

Dante- Where is he?

Doran- ....

Deena- ....

Kurt- ....

*explosions in the background* 

Doran, Deena, and Kurt- SEE YA DANTE HAVE FUN *as they run away*

Dante- I WILL MAKE AL OF YOU PAY FOR THIS!!


END

Hope you enjoy this mini story Me and TechNinjaDes created and tell me if I should make a second one I don't know if TechNinjaDes will help with the next one but ya thanks for reading. 
  • Undertaker699
    Undertaker699
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    haha to funny
  • Marcobaubaumiciomici
    Marcobaubaumiciomici
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    this discussion should be moved into "fan creations"
    good job anyway, i'm very interested to see how it goes

  • MX36
    MX36
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    So.. in other words, Mark is the human version of RUBI?  :D
    this should be a regular thing.. it's very funny and entertaining. good job!
    P Sherman, 42 Wallaby Way, Sydney.
  • DevineWindToo
    DevineWindToo
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    Joined May 2014 Posts: 702
    LMAO, but I also notice nobody actually tried to rescue "wrong thinker" are you guys trying to tell us something?
  • Marcobaubaumiciomici
    Marcobaubaumiciomici
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    LMAO, but I also notice nobody actually tried to rescue "wrong thinker" are you guys trying to tell us something?
    he's being kept captive by the creator of this elite legion

  • abdullahmushtaq
    abdullahmushtaq
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    This is a really good created post, you should make a movie or something.
  • redspower67
    redspower67
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    Jason- COME BACK HERE!!

    Todd- WE JUST GOT IT FIXED!!

    Engineer- Hey guys Marks taking the Growler again. 

    Worker- No No No NO. We just fixed that!

    Worker- Someone take out the treads and back tires so it can move. HURRY!

    ( Back in the command room )

    Commander- ( Talking Over loudspeaker ) SOMEONE GET HIM OUT OF THERE AND PUT HIM IN THE MEDICL BAY, AND PUT GUARDS THERE TO WATCH HIM!!  

    Jericho- That's easier said than done. 

    Commander- I know that but were going to need the Growler in the coming fight and missions. 

    Commander- Anyway ( Speaking in a serous tone ) Any news on Wrong Thinker. Did you find anything?

    Jericho- ( Shaking his head ) No sir nothing, but I am sure that legion what ever it is was what he was trying to worn us about.

    Commander- ( He sighs loudly) I figured as much. You fought the thing is there any thing else you can tell me?

    Jericho- Maybe one thing we saw them testing it on some nightmares and it fire some kind of missile shower.

    Commander- What? A missile shower? This day keeps getting better and better.   

    Jericho- The thing is the nightmares were not destroyed. 

    Commander- What?

    Jericho- They looked shocked more than anything. 

    Commander- So we've got a "mech" that can duplicate itself, and fire a shower of shock missiles, and managed to take out not only your platoon, but also the archangel. 

    Commander- Just perfect. 

    ( Then they both jumped a little when they heard an explosion outside )

    Commander- OOHH WHAT NOW!!
  • e_van_r
    e_van_r
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    lol, thanks
  • Andy45
    Andy45
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    Joined Sep 2013 Posts: 339
    @redspower67  and @TechNinjaDes just a suggestion but i would love to read what happens when MARK takes the INFERNO if you can make something like that it would be a great read i have really enjoyed reading this whole thing and love it keep up the great work :)
  • redspower67
    redspower67
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    Don't worry he will. IT will be "Fun". XD
  • DCFIREMAN
    DCFIREMAN
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    Enter the Sniper...... LOL


  • DarkSkinNinja
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    *over the loud speaker* Mark has just destroyed 3 power plants

    Commander- **** it *walks outside* 

    *growler drives toward the commander*

    Commander- *sighs* if you want something done right....*dives out of the way and puts explosive on the growler*

    Commander- .....you gotta do it yourself *clicks button*

    *growler treads explode* 

    Mark- *flies out of the growler* ouch

    Commander- get him to the medic bay and be sure he is guarded 24/7

    *loud speaker* COMMANDER, AND ALL SQUAD LEADERS REPORT TO THE COMMAND ROOM

    *10 mins later in the command room* 

    Commander- Jason what is it

    Jason- we have an incoming transmission 

    Kara- from who

    Jason- General Mutoto...

    Jericho- accept it

    Jason- *clicks button* 

    Mutoto- i see you have encountered my new weapon, how did you like it

    Dante- you sick monster, you will pay for the men you killed

    Mutoto- but see Dante if you hadnt left, i wouldnt have needed a new weapon, this is on you

    Dante- i will be sure i see you die for what youve done

    Mutoto- hmph, good luck, oh and before i leave, Jericho, attacking me again, isnt the smartest idea, this time follow orders

    Jericho- how do you...

    Mutoto- lets say i have ears everywhere, goodluck....Commander *screen statics out* 

    Jericho- who's the rat, ITS PROBABLY YOU DANTE

    Dante- IF IT WERE ME YOUD BE DEAD BY NOW

    *loud explosion outside*

    *alarm sounds* 

    *loud speaker* we are under attack all men and women to battle staions, defend this base

    Commander- we will figure this out later, get out there and defend our base now
    you challenge me in forums?Image result for anime gif swordsmanthen be prepared to lose.
  • Initial_Degeneration
    Initial_Degeneration
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    I love this whole story thing. Great reading.


  • Dune Rader
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    well done guys 

    Respect, Courage and Wisdom
  • redspower67
    redspower67
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    Thanks, but half of the credit goes to TechNinjaDes. He and I hopefully will be able to continue the story.

  • redspower67
    redspower67
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    Commander- You men get the night owls prepped moved to the drone silos. Now!   

    Workers- Yes Sir! 

    Commander- Da*m. Sarkis just had to be visiting Corpus for info. 

    Commander- ( To himself ) We need to find out who is attacking us noOOWWW OH SH*T!!!

    ( He yelled as the ground collapsed below him from what seem like a Commando"s rocket )

    Commander- ah son of Bi*ch. Its not a car its rocket. 

    ( His left leg was cut and had pieces of metal piercing the front of it, but could still walk his head was also bleeding but paid little attention to it as he limped his way to the Ronin that was parked about 20 feet away ) 

    Commander- Da*m these guys this was my favorite suit. 

    Doran- ( from across the room ) Sir are you alright?!!

    ( The commander nodded and waved him away and pointed to his custom Nightmare trying to signal him to get in and provide cover fire, and he seemed to get it and he started to spring over to the nightmare )

    Commander- I swear Doran's Fu*ken Psychic.

    ( He finally made it to the ronin )

    Commander- *groans* I don't remember the hatch being so high and the ronin so big. 

    ( A lot of cursing and 2 failed attempts at climbing later ) 

    Commander- *Wheezing* Da*m Ryu-Ki engineers and there stupid designs that assume everyones a Da*m ninja. 

    ( He placed the V.A.H. ( Visual Aid Helmet) on his now poorly bandaged head and turned on his earpiece/microphone )

    Commander Doran you there?

    Doran- Ya i'm hear but a little busy at the moment. ( explosions in the back ground)

    Commander- I'm coming to assist in the Ronin, I want to test out the railgun myself I heard it pretty fun to use.

    Doran- Are you sure you should be fighting in your condition sir?

    Commander- I'll be fine. Now lets GIVE THEM HE*LLL!!!

    Doran- YES SIR!!  

     
  • kixeyeuser_1387864116824_100007309512820
    kixeyeuser_1387864116824_100007309512820
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    man the both of you guys have made this funny and enjoyable good job  B)
  • lone-gunner63
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    i will wait for dvd versionto come out too busy playing WC to read lol 
  • lone-gunner63
    lone-gunner63
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    i will wait for dvd versionto come out too busy playing WC to read lol 
    but great job so far 
  • Dune Rader
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    you can see were so much talent is wasted keep up the good work guys 

    Respect, Courage and Wisdom
  • redspower67
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    edited 24 Apr 2016, 8:06PM
    Yes we know the growler is not able to be used as a base defender normally but this is a more realistic series. 


    Commander- Use the Growler as a shield and if there out of some miracle one of them survives capture them and question him.

    Mark- No Promises!

    Commander- I hope I don't live to regret letting him drive the Growler. 

    Commander- Jason you there? Jason?

    Jason- *Crying* What? 

    Commander- Are you crying?

    Jason- No! *sniffle* 

    Commander- ( Bul**hit he thinks to himself ) Anyway I need you to contact Sarkis he should be at Corpus right now. 

    Jason- ( After pulling himself together ) Corpus? Why is he there? 

    Commander- That is none of your concern just tell him to get back ASAP.

    Jason- Ok fine i'm on it.

    Commander- Now back to the task at hand.

    He turns the Ronin out from behind the rampaging Growler and targets 2 vanquishers and fires the railgun at the first sending it spiraling into a nearby tree setting it a blaze, he then targeted the second that had began to accelerate in reverse firing spastically in an attempt to keep him away.

    Commander- Oh he*l no you can't get away.

    He aimed the railgun above the retreating vanquisher and firing a shot that made a crater behind it that the vanquisher then fell into. 

    Commander- And boom goes the dynamite. *click* 

    The trapped vanquisher into a fireball of twisted metal and what used to be the drivers. 

    Commander- Yay barbecue.

    His little victory didn't last long as he saw three viper class mech suits waring war paint approaching.
     
    Commander- Oh Sh*t

    He switched the Ronin into reverse as he fired the railgun at the closest but, it dodged it and began its advance again. 

    Commander- Hey where are those night owls I asked to be ready. 

    Commander- Hello?  If anyone is receiving I need assistance now!!

    He fired at front of them in an attempt to  throw them of balance. One then attempted to fire its corrosive payload at him as he attempted to dodge one of corrosive booms hit the armor of the left arm, and began to melt. 

    Commander- Sh*t 
       
  • xXLeadTheChargeXx
    xXLeadTheChargeXx
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    Great story, But where the hell is the inferno? xD, suggestion, Bring out te X units! (Crusader, widowmaker, viper) Continue te story!!!!!!
    Lead the charge into the battlefield of life, May god be with you all and let evil not drive you to hell, You think you stand alone, but you will always have family and friends to pick you up when you fall,
  • redspower67
    redspower67
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    We plan to save the inferno for possibly series 2 and the viper x was mentioned in the last post it just doesn't say X. 
  • xXLeadTheChargeXx
    xXLeadTheChargeXx
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    Okay :smiley:  btw can mark die?
    Lead the charge into the battlefield of life, May god be with you all and let evil not drive you to hell, You think you stand alone, but you will always have family and friends to pick you up when you fall,
  • redspower67
    redspower67
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    He has luck beyond belief. 
  • Depressed Thinker
    Depressed Thinker
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    Okay :smiley:  btw can mark die?
    He has luck beyond belief. 
    The only way is if he turns into a Zombie and even that is technically not dead.
    I am retired at the moment. I got a Xbox now. (DM for gamer tag.)

    As for War Commander I will probably come back around October 2018.
    Granted if Net Neutrality gets taken down. Then forget about any free to pay/play games for me. (I have a soft spot for holidays and zombies)
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